hey what's up guys and hey what's up guys and welcome back to I forgot my intro it's been 84 years let's try that one more time hey what's up guys and welcome back to IGCSE success your one shop onetop shop onetop shop one eternity later hey what's up guys and welcome back to IGCSE success your onstop shop for everything first language English first of all are we all doing well if you're not doing well this dark storm will pass and by Dark Storm I am of course referring to most of you watching this being in a thick of your IGCSE exam o I need to put the airon on it is 91,000 damn degrees so if you are sitting your exams just remember keep working hard hard don't burn the Midnight Oil too frequently and show Cambridge What You're Made Of and I forgot to say number one rule look after yourselves so on to today's agenda guys we have a jam packed video and when I say jam-pack there's no hyperbole there trust me I will be diving deep into all of the writers effect questions from the November series yes all three I'm putting myself through such torture for you guys can't do it you can so if you are feeling a little bit shaky on those pesky writers effect questions this video is your golden ticket and this is the only video you need I promise you I will be taking you through some strategies that I use with my year 11s I'll show you some Nifty tips and tricks and of course I will provide full model responses for each paper so buckle up grab your favorite beverage of choice and let's dive straight in because something tells me this is going to be an Almighty long video and with all that said and done let's go okay guys so let's not waste any more time as mentioned I am going to be showing you three full writers effect responses and I will link all of uh the past papers in the description box should you wish to have a go and I strongly recommend that you do have a go um along with this video just make sure that you pay attention to the codes on the screen so 050011 050012 050013 and these refer to the three different paper ones from the October November 2023 Series so first of all let's go through the basics the nuts and bolts of the writer's effect question so the first thing is that you are assessed on your your ability to identify powerful words phrases and images yes you can refer to other things as long as they link to meaning but if you're not the strongest with this question I strongly recommend that you just stick to zooming into powerful words phrases uh or imagery so similes personification metaphors onoma appear Etc now the word count the suggested word count is 200 to 300 words do write more if time permits I strongly advise my students particularly those who are good with literature and analyzing language to go over the word count as long as they stay focused Cambridge likes to use his very self- penalizing a lot and that basically means that the more you write the less likely it is for you to uh sustain that Focus yes you can get full Mar sticking to that word count but the most important thing is that you spend 30 minutes on this question and if that means writing two pages three pages that's absolutely fine number three of course you are directed to two different paragraphs from Tex C The Narrative at the end and you have to write two separate paragraphs so a paragraph on each and there should be three quotations in each do not analyze two do not analyze one and there's no need to analyze more than three six in total number four be sure to explore the explicit and implicit ideas so the explicit meaning of words so showing what those words or phrases mean within the given context and it acts as a nice springboard into your analysis exploring those implicit deeper meanings of the words or the phrases or the images that you have selected and lastly of course is this question is worth 15 marks 15 reading marks there are no marks for writing so I think I've said this before you can have a somewhat haphazard writing style and still get top marks just make sure your writing is clear coherent to some degree um the structure which I will come on to shortly there's some flexibility there and if you have a look at my notes and tips on the right hand side it is not a requirement to refer to subject specific terms but it certainly will elevate your response remember examiners have to mark hundreds of scripts uh I used to Mark uh exam papers myself and it was always quite impressive when students had a strong grasp of word classes the different types of imagery um and perhaps and I say perhaps uh referring to these techniques accurately May well give you uh your response sorry the edge over others now I'm just going to start by reading the notes and tips on the right hand side I've put here there is not one correct way to structure a response in it is a reading response As Long as You Follow some sort of Point evidence explain structure that's absolutely fine just write clearly just make sure that an examiner can sort of understand what you're trying to say make a point use evidence and zoom in that's absolutely fine it is a reading assessment however with that said this is the structure that I use with my year 11 students and I have used this structure for many many years I do tend to tweak it from time to time but essentially there are 10 steps so the first step is establishing the overall effect of the language so what is the writer trying to achieve so each topic sentence will each paragraph sorry will begin with this topic sentence the overall effect of the language creates an image of and then you'll include your first image so firstly the writer describes um if you're good with embedding your quotations that's absolutely great if not you can just put firstly the wrer uses the image again that's absolutely fine as well number three The Writer's use of imagery here refers to take note of that verb refers to this is where you explain the explicit meaning of the word or phrase number four your most important step this is your analysis this is where you zoom into an aspect of the language um this is your implicit exploration this is where you get your marks from essentially well most of your marks from then you kind of repeat the steps so number five secondly the right to describe that's your first that's your second image sorry number six the zoom in technique number six exploring the explicit meaning of your second image number seven you use the zoom in technique again number eight your third quotation number nine your explicit meaning and number 10 of course is your analysis so you just repeat those steps if you can remember this structure you're going to do absolutely fine providing your analysis is focused providing your analysis is relevant to the question so let's kickart with our first paper The Narrative is titled the new job and it comes from the 0511 paper and my tips on the right hand side are to carefully reread the two paragraphs you are directed to ensuring you understand the context and what is happening so texy the new job bit of context at the top let's take a read so this text is about a young person called jeswin who has just started to work for an airline company called Golden tours as part of the airport meet and greet team jeswin is being looked after on his first day by a senior member of the team Edgar let's read the story Edgar laid his large hand on Jess win's small shoulder and Strode onto the wide departures Concourse as Jess win tripped and danced to keep up with him you're going to be very busy today Edgar announced an ironic Grimace con tort in his round face Edgard stopped suddenly and twisted jeswin shoulder through a dizzying 180° so that jeswin could see the workplace The Concourse at present was eerily silent it comprised many empty rotof labyrinths that passengers would negotiate before they reached the check-in desk where their luggage would be surrendered into the safe hands of golden tour staff and deposited in the cargo area of the plane jeswin wriggled to detach himself from Edgar's large hand he had been attached in a more figurative sense today to Edgard to learn his job making sure that the passengers had the documents they needed to fly showing them where to take their luggage and giving helpful and friendly advice Edgar's expression began to radiate mild exasperation and jeswin turned to see its focus a small knot of passengers wandering uncertainly towards the golden tours check-in area their luggage trolley was performing a shaky dance not dissimilar to the movements of jeswin own feet a few minutes earlier a small child hung onto its side trying to deter three disobedient suitcases from unscheduled disembarkation JZ win immediately understood that his family might need support I got a report to write for the boss tonight h Edgard apparently she doesn't know what our job involves ha he marched towards the group good morning your documents please so I can make sure they are in order before you drop your luggage off Edgard flipped through identity documents with the dexterity of a master player shuffling a deck of cards before surveying the three suitcases take it you pack both suitcases yourselves and you haven't been out of sight since you got here go to the roped area over there shouldn't be too long to wait now a few more groups were drawing closer jeswin approached the nearest group and followed the routine this continued throughout the morning meeting and greeting passengers bound from numerous destinations Edgard had also told him to watch out for unattended luggage and Report such items to him this worried JZ win it felt like too much to focus on at once especially as there seemed to be a lot of luggage around generally though jeswin was pleased with himself he was not as fast as Edgard of course but he remembered the meet and greet procedure and he felt his courteous Manner and diligence paid off as he often received smiles and thanks in return Edgard on the other hand was becoming more irritable 15 minutes for lunch as usual he grumbled I've hardly seen you this morning young man has everything been all right suddenly a shout came from one of the CU hey that man tried to steal my wallet an angry face accuser stood finger aim as an older man behind him Edgard immediately intervened have we got a thief he demanded no I'm not a thief I'm a little unsteady on my feet and I fell over the older man's chin wobbled as he spoke and jine saw his eyes blinking rapidly surely he was innocent let me help jesmine said there is probably some mistake here but you sir have had a bit of a shock and need reassuring about your possession so I'm going to ask Leo over there to let you put your luggage in right now meanwhile you sir mustn't keep standing in this uncomfortable way I am going to carry your suitcase over there to Maria as jeswin returned from Marie's desk he saw Edgard smiling in approval well handled young man you've given me some ideas for this report I've got to write now let's take a look at a standard writer's effect question so of course it asks you to reread two paragraphs in the case of this paper it's asking you to reread paragraphs 2 and four usually once you've read the story one time you kind of you can kind of take a guess uh which paragraphs are going to be chosen because they're full of unusual images there's two bullet points of course so paragraph 2 begins you're going to be followed by ellipses and is about jez wins and Edgar's experiences at the beginning of the day that information is really important paragraph 4 begins Edgar's expression began and is about the arrival of the first passengers of the day and then you've got your standard instructions at the bottom so explain how the writer uses language to convey meaning and to create effect in these paragraphs choose three examples of words or phrases from each paragraph to support your answer your choices should include the use of imagery write about 200 to 300 words and up to 15 marks are available for the content of your answer and my tips on the side pay close attention I cannot stress this enough pay close attention to the information provided after after the ellipses and try and include some of that information into your topic sentence for each paragraph So bullet point one for example it's about jeswin and eduard's experience so your so the focus of your paragraph will be centered around that similarly for bullet point 2 it's about the arrival of the first passengers of the day so of course you need to try and include that keyw passenger is there in your topic sentence for the second paragraph So let's annotate but before we do that we need to reread the first paragraph We Are directed to now remember to select your chosen images ensuring to highlight them it's good practice and provide a brief annotation on their implicit meanings and if you've got time the explicit meaning as well but it should be a very very quick brief annotation so let's reread the first paragraph We Are directed to you're going to be very busy today Edgard announced an ironic Grimace contorting his round face Edgard stopped suddenly and twisted JZ win's shoulder through a dizzying 180° so that jeswin could see the workplace The Concourse at present was eerily silent it comprised many empty ropes of labyrinths that passengers would negotiate before they reached the check-in desk where their luggage would be surrendered into the safe hands of golden T staff and deposited into the cargo area of the plane now before I show you the three images I have selected take note of the tips be sure to identify powerful words phrases and images only again I would avoid sort of irony foreshadowing sort of structural techniques if you're not the best at this question you can get full marks just focusing on words phrases and images and ensure you understand the vocabulary contained within your images don't try and take a stab in the dark there will always be more than three images so make sure you are confident with the vocab and aim to make two inferences about each image now let's take a look at the three images that I would personally select if I was doing this paper for real the first one is an ironic Grimace contorting Edgar's round face the second one is Edgard twisting jeswin shoulder through a dizzying 180° how pleasant of him and the the last one is the airport comprising of many empty roped off labyrinths now this table May well seem quite overwhelming to you I did say before your annotations need to be quite brief and quite quick but obviously I want to show you the process and I want to show you the kind of detail that Cambridge expect particularly if you are aiming for top marks so we're talking about 13 14 15 out of 15 so looking at that first image an ironic Grimace contorting his face in terms of what that means explicitly within the given context this refers to the unpleasant expression that Edgard wears now the implicit meaning the deeper meaning very much suggests that Edgard is keenly aware of the impending chaos and busyness almost as if he is cynically anticipating jeswin struggle to navigate the influx of passengers and the many problems that are bound to arise now my second image Twisted jeswin shoulders for a dizzying 180° this explicitly refers to Edgard forcibly spinning jeswin around so he's able to see the workplace and the implicit meaning could suggest that eduard's sudden stop and physical maneuver very much highlights his assertiveness and perhaps even dominance he takes control of Jes win's body to ensure that jeswin sees what he wants him to see thus the dominance the assertiveness the control as if he has taken advantage of JZ win's newness to the job and my last image it compris many empty roped off labyrinths this refers to the airport being like a maze and very much being difficult to navigate and this seems to suggest the passengers will inevitably find it difficult to reach the check-in desk now focusing on the bullet point at hand this hints at Jin's over whelming feelings and perhaps his sense of being daunted by what lies ahead now let's take a look at the second paragraph We Are directed to so Edgar's expression began to radiate mild exasperation and jesin turned to se its focus a small knot of passengers wandering uncertainly towards the golden tours check-in area their luggage trolley was performing a shaky dance not dissimilar to the movements of Jin's own feet a few minutes earlier a small child onto its side trying to deter three disobedient suitcases from unscheduled disembarkation very striking personification there now the images I have selected are radiant mild exasperation wering uncertainly and lastly the suitcas is performing a shaky dance now let's take a look at the explicit meaning and the implicit meaning of the three images I have selected so start starting with radiate mild exasperation this explicitly refers to Edgar's feelings of annoyance and frustration as the first wave of passengers approaches him in terms of the deeper meaning it highlights Edgar's clear resentment towards his job and its primary focus of delivering top quality customer service to ensure passenger satisfaction before their flights it also implies a level of unprofessionalism as Edgar struggles to conceal his emotions and maintain a welcome and demeanor with the passengers so hopefully you can see here guys I'm looking at different layers of meaning I'm saying at least two things and that's really what you want to aim to do if you are trying to secure top marks the second image wandering uncertainly so this refers to the passengers being unsure of which direction to proceed thereby emphasizing the challenges of navigating the airport now this suggests Edgar's perception of them as clueless in his eyes they struggle to navigate something as seem ly straightforward as reaching the checkin Des reveals a lack of empathy on his part and my last image performing a shaky dance this explicitly refers to the trolley's instability and difficulty in moving smoothly and the implicit meaning implies a sense of frustration and irritation perhaps reflecting Edgar's anti anticipation of the passengers causing inconvenience or delay now let's take a look at a model response a top response response for each of those paragraphs now if you have a look on the right hand side I've colorcoded each model response I've included in this presentation so red is the topic sentence the overall effect of the language blue is the quotation purple is the explicit meaning orange zoom in and black is the implicit exploration or the analysis the overall effect of the language creates an image of Edgard feeling both accustomed to and bitter about his new job and his workplace whilst also conveying jeswin feelings of being overwhelmed at his new role and what it entails firstly the writer describes Edgard as having an ironic Grimace contorting his round face the writer's use of imagery here refers to the unpleasant expression Edgar wears conveying a palpable sense of dissatisfaction Additionally the writer's use of the phrase ironic Grimace is particularly powerful implying that Edgard is keenly aware of the impending chaos and busyness almost as if he is cynically anticipating jesin struggle to navigate the influx of passengers and the many problems that are bound to arise secondly the writer describes Edgard twisting Jin's little shoulder through a dizzying 180° The Writer's use of imagery here refers to Edgar forcibly spinning jesin around so he's able to see the workplace furthermore The Writer's use of the verb Twisted is particularly striking as Edgar's sudden stop and physical maneuver demonstrate his assertiveness and perhaps even dominant he takes control of jesu's body to ensure that jesin sees what he wants him to see as if he's taken advantage of jeswin newness to the job lastly the writer describes the workplace as compromising many empty roped off Labyrinth the Writ use of imagery here refers to the airport being like a maze making it difficult to navigate moreover the writers use of the word Labyrinth it particularly effective as it suggests that passengers will inevitably find it difficult to reach the check-in hinting at jesu's overwhelming feelings and perhaps his sense of being daunted by what lies ahead and the second paragraph the overall effect of the language creates an image of Edgard viewing the passengers as nothing more than bothersome nuisances firstly the writer describe Edgard radiating mild exasperation The Writer's use of imagery here refers to Edgar's feelings of annoyance and frustration as the first wave of passengers approaches him additionally the writer's use of the word exasperation is particularly powerful indicating Edgar's clear resentment towards his job and its primary objective of delivering top quality customer service to ensure passenger satisfaction before their flights it also implies a level of unprofessionalism as Edgar struggles to conceal his emotions and Main a welcoming demean with his passengers secondly the writer describes the initial wave of passengers as wandering uncertainly towards the check-in desk The Writer's use of imagery here refers to the passengers being unsure of which direction to proceed thereby emphasizing the challenges of navigating the airport furthermore The Writer's use of the phrase wandering uncertainly is particularly striking as it suggests Edgar's perception of them as clueless in his eyes they struggle to navigate something as seemingly straightforward as reaching the checking desk reveals a lack of empathy on his part lastly the writer described the passengers luggage trolley as performing a shaky Dance The Writer's use of imagery here refers to the instability and difficulty in moving smoothly moreover The Writer's use of personification is particularly effective as it implies a sense of frustration and irritation perhaps reflecting Edgar's anticipation of the passengers causing inconvenience or delay now let's take a read of the Second Story titled the Lost cave 05002 the Lost cave Rowan wants to start up his own Building Company called RS building Works he has decided to build an office in the garden to work in and to meet his clients Rowan was tugging at the thick green ivy plant smothering the 3M rock face at the bottom of the garden shimer looked at the ivy cascading down curtain-like over the natural wall it softens that overhanging rock she commented it's all the way it's all in the way I'm afraid and I'm not sure what's behind it said Rowan if RS building Works he going to be successful I need a space to work in we have to make some sacrifices if we are going to earn money I understand said shimer she returned to the house she was working on an important assignment for a college archaeology course one day I will go on a real archaeological dig she mused rather than just writing about other people's discoveries she smiled at an idea that they had neither the opportunity nor money for now in the garden things had taken a more violent turn surrendering to one last Mighty Heath the roots of the ivy suddenly collapsed away above the rock face with the completeness a breaking chrysis shell Rowan toppled heavily backwards as eager Green Ivy tendrils sprang towards him taken by surprise he rived around under many stringy choking fingers for several seconds before ripping his mischievous as salance away unaware of events outside shimer paused at her laptop thinking about the bees and the butterflies and the intrusive Ivy attracted she realized that she had mixed feelings about the building project Rowan lifted himself to his elbows he hadn't broken twisted or pulled anything important and he freed himself from the remaining foliage he looked at what was left of the rock face a gaping horse stared defiantly back at him as if inviting a standoff Rowan dropped his eyes to break the Gaze and received an immense surprise half a meter from the base was the floor of a cave entrance it was surely inviting him to look inside after brushing off dead leaf detrus cobwebs and insects Rowan slowly approached the mouth of the cave he peered inside his heart pounding imagine finding a cave in your garden gosh the air was still dry and cold the smell an old age musty scent within a few meters everything appeared lost in suffocating blackness armed now with a torch Rowan advaned into the cave at first it was dry and vaguely warm as he traveled deeper roran found himself contorting his shoulders and lowering his head to navigate an increasingly confined space he walked down a gentle slope with ction trying to avoid treacherously loose Stones Under Foot the walls swallowed the light he flashed the torch up to the ceiling then right and left ahead of his feet in front of him the path suddenly ended did Rowan could barely believe what he had found a huge Cavern had appeared dropping perhaps 10 M below the height looked to be the same in the dim distance was the cavern wall hello sang out Rowan and was greeted with a gratifying Echo he laughed out loud then stood in awe at his find the bright Spotlight Shone down on animal bones though which animals they belonged to was a mystery it didn't take a genius to realize that the remains of these creatures had once been animals that had run into the cave to escape a predator only to fall headlong to their death he spotted deer antas which solved one puzzle maybe shimer could identify the other old maybe even extinct species would this be their new project could they hope to make money slowly Rowan moved the beam around the cavern he realized he had stopped breathing and took in a large lung full of air it was air that must have lingered in this place for thousands of years and it left a dry ashike taste on his tongue suddenly he heard movement behind him he turned quickly oh my goodness he heard shimer call out so let's reread the first paragraph We Are directed to so in the guard things had taken a more violent turn surrendering to one last Mighty Heath the roots of the ivy suddenly collapsed away above the rock face with the completeness of breaking Chrysalis shell rorin toppled heavily backwards as eager Green Ivy tendrils sprang towards him taken by surprise he wried around under many stringy choking fingers for several seconds before ripping his mischievous as salance away now let's take a look at the three images I have selected so the first one is violent turn the second one is the ivy tendril springing towards Rowan and the last one is the image of the the choking fingers lovely image there now let's take a look at this table which breaks down the explicit and implicit meaning of My Chosen images so the first one violent turn this explicitly refers to Rowan's determined effort to dislodge The Ivy from The Rock phase the implicit meaning suggests a fierce confrontation between Rowan And The Ivy very much emphasizing his unwavering determination to clear it away and this resistance and struggle may also hint at the Ivy's reluctance to reveal what lies hidden behind it which of course is a secret cave now my second image is the ivy springing towards Rowan now the explicit meaning refers to the thin winding and twisting parts of the ivy rebounding in rowen's Direction now this suggests a sense of aggression bonification of course is being used used here as if the ivy possesses a predatory nature and is poised to retaliate for being forcibly torn away from the rock face and my last image of course is the choking fingers a very striking image there explicitly referring to rowing struggling to escape from The Ivy as it is tightly wrapped around his body and this emphasizes how the ivy is exerting an immense amount of pressure on Rowan's body causing a sense of Suffocation and entrapment now let's reread the second paragraph We Are directed to so Rowan is now armed with a torch he advances into the cave at first it was dry and vaguely warm as he travel deeper Rowan found himself contorting his shoulders and lowering his head to navigate an increasingly confined space he walked down a gentle slope with caution trying to avoid treacherously loose Stones Under Foot the walls swallowed the light he flashed the torch up to the ceiling then right and left ahead of his feet now the three images I have chosen the first one is Rowan being armed with a torch the second one is Rowan having to navigate an increasingly confined space and the last one is the wall swallowing the light so Rowan being enveloped in complete darkness now in terms of that first image Rowan being armed with a torch explicitly this refers to Rowan being equipped with a flashlight of course uh to navigate the darkness of the cave now the implicit meaning the important bit um it very much creates a sense of Rowan entering into a battle likee scenario because of that verb armed and this is as if he's anticipating encountering something dark something ominous something for boing and there's this feeling that he needs to be prepared for any challenge that may arise it also conveys a feeling of trepidation is may be somewhat fearful anxious um and it suggest that Rowan is venturing into the unknown a dark abyss that may conceal something mysterious who knows now my second image is Rowan having to navigate an increasingly confined space now this explicitly refers to the narrowing space through which Rowan must maneuver in the cave which progressively becomes smaller and more challenging to navigate now the implicit meaning creates a sense of claustrophobia making the path seem both daunting and perilous now my last image the walls swallowed the light of course explicitly this refers to the Cav refusal to emit light enveloping row in darkness and implicitly this suggests that the cave could Harbor Secrets as if it resist revealing what lies within its depths now let's take a look at the two model paragraphs for this question the overall effect of the language creates an image of Rowan battling with the ivy almost as if it is a forceful and aggressive presence trying to ens snare him firstly the writer describes that things had taken a more violent turn the writer's use of imagery here refers to Rowan's determined effort to dislodge The Ivy from The Rock face additionally the writer's use the phrase violent turn is particularly powerful as it suggests a fears confrontation between Rowan And The Ivy emphasizing his unwavering determination to clear it away this resistance and struggle may also hint at the Ivy's reluctance to reveal what lies behind it a secret cave secondly the writer describes how eager Green Ivy tendril sprang towards Rowan The Writer's use of imagery refers to the thin winding and twisting parts of the ivy rebounding in Rowan's Direction furthermore the use of the phrase sprang towards his particular striking suggesting a sense of aggression as if the IV possesses a predatory nature and is poised to retaliate for being forcibly torn away from the rock face lastly the writer describes Rowan riving around under many stringy choking fingers for several seconds The Writer's use of imagery here refers to Rowan struggling to escape from The Ivy as it is tightly wound around his body moreover The Writer's use of the phrase choking fingers is particularly effective and emphasizes how the IV is exerting an immense amount of pressure on Rowan's body causing a sense of Suffocation and entrapment second paragraph reads the overall effect of the language creates an image of Rowan's journey into the cas shifting from familiarity to unease as he navigates confined spaces with growing apprehension in in the enveloping darkness firstly the writer describes Rome being armed with a torch The Writer's use of the image here refers to Rowan being equipped with the flashlight to navigate the dark cave Additionally the writer's use of the verb armed is particularly powerful evoking a sense of Rowan entering into a battle like scenario as if anticipating encountering something dark and Sinister and feeling the need to be prepared for any challenge that may arise it also conveys a feeling of trepidation suggesting that Rowan is venturing into the unknown a dark abyss that may conceal something mysterious secondly the writer describe rowing having to navigate an increasingly confined space the writer use of imagery here refers to the narrowing space through which Rowan must maneuver in the cave which progressively becomes smaller and more challenging to Traverse furthermore The Writer's use of the adjective confined is particularly striking as it creates a sense of claustrophobia making the path seem both daunting and perilous lastly the writer describes how the W swallowed the light the writer's use of imagery here refers to the cas's refusal to emit light enveloping R in darkness moreover the writer use of the verb swallowed is particularly effective implying that the cave Harbors Secrets as if it resists revealing what lies within its depths hopefully guys with my 10-step structure you're starting to get the idea by now remember we want a really sort of formulaic approach to this it's different to a Literary Response if any of you guys do igcc literature or world literature and you're watching this don't blur the two so we are finally on to our last story titled the violinist if you've made it this far let me know in the comments and write I have made it to the violinist or something something to let me know you've made it this far if you have give yourself a pat on the back and I thank you from the bottom of my heart uh this is the 0513 paper so text the violinist this text is taken from a story about a violin player called Seth who plays in a traveling Orchestra the orchestra has arrived in town where Seth will be playing a violin solo in the evening so Seth was roaming the streets and looking in shop Windows a few hours idle distraction made for a more focused mind later he found more significantly he really enjoyed getting to see the locality he would perform in whil possibly learning a bit about people who might attend the concert he stopped in the presence of a small music store and decided to look inside partially concealed at the back of the shop was a display of string instruments at the center of which sat an absurdly squat violin to Seth it looked like a plump Monarch holding Court amidst other carefully arranged instruments he stared at it drawn by its commanding presence the maker had put considerable effort into carving the decorative top or scroll into a magnetically Charming Faith with with generous lips pulled sideways and flattened into an expression of permanent mert but it was the cheerful eyes now apparently winking and dancing at Seth that really captivated him ah more personification I dare you the viin size jeez where did Cambridge get these stories from how quirky yet attractive thought Seth I wonder if it plays well may I try that violin please he asked the shop attendant violin in hand Seth stopped four strings with his fingers and Drew the bow over them with one rapid sweep he'd produce a rich cord he was surprised at how strong the sound was he raised his bow again and the violing replied enchantingly Seth felt excitement shooting through him he turned the ATT attendant how much is it he asked you can have it for a fair price said the attendant I didn't pay much for it a local brought it in last month said he found it a long time ago tried to find out who owned it at the time but without success then he just forgot about it later in the concert hall Seth opened the violin case and looked contentedly at his purchase he had his old trusty violin by his side but knew he would play this new one tonight it felt irrational but it was almost as if the violin longed to be played and especially in this venue the last hour of rehearsing had proved what a magnificent instrument it was the arrival of the audience and the preparations of the other musicians were now taking place a multitude of subdued murmurs in the audience accompanied the discordant scraping of strings and sharply persistent blowing of reads now and then a loud trombone would assert itself or an OBO plaintiff notes would rise demanding immediate attention to its great misery it was time for Seth's solo his new violin sang out beautifully around the hall the audience was completely still apart from a woman who had inclined forward as if straining to see the instrument he was playing an hour later as he left he saw the same woman waiting outside hello I'm Sylvia she said well that was a surprise I haven't heard that violin played for years it's one of the best violins I've ever played Seth replied do you know the story of this scroll in reply Sylvia showed Seth a photograph on her phone Seth found himself staring back at a pair of bright cheerful eyes that winked and danced at him father Sylvia explained my parents played in the orchestra at this very Concert Hall years ago mother had this violin made with Father's face on on the scroll it disappeared after a show about 5 years ago the orchestra had to leave leave straight after to go on tour and mother was devastated not to be able to take that violin my parents don't play at all these days though they sometimes attend concerts here to support the local Orchestra she paused I think my mother will be pleased to hear that the violin has been found may I contact your parents asked Seth apologies guys I think I skipped uh a couple of slides from the previous question um so uh do make sure that you look at the actual question again the resources are linked in the description box below however it's always important to read the question especially that information after the ellipses so paragraph 3 begins partially concealed and is about the violin that Seth sees in the back of the shop and paragraph 11 Begins the arrival of the audience and it's about the activity in the concert hall before the concert begins so some really key information there to include in your topic sentences to make sure your paragraphs are focused on what the writer is trying to achieve so now let's take a look at the three images I have chosen so the first image is the violin being partially concealed the second one is the violin having a magnetically Charming face and the last image is the scroll of the violing having cheerful eyes and now apparently winking and dancing at se as if it's kind of like flirting and trying to entice him like byy me byy me because that's what violins do right so the first image I have selected is the violin being partially concealed this explicitly refers to the instrument being almost hidden an implicit meaning this seems to hint towards the violin's uniqueness as if it possesses a mysterious quality waiting to be uncovered perhaps imbued with some magical power who knows the second image is the scroll of the violing being carved to resemble this sort of magnetically charming face of what was her name again Sylvia Sylvia's father and this refers to the attractive aesthetic of the violin evoking its visual appeal now this also implies the violin possesses or seems to imply that the violin possesses an irresistible aore or Charisma almost enchanting Seth and tempting him to purchase it as if the violin is putting Seth under its spell because again what I said before you know violins have the power to do that hey it's a piece of Pros guys Anything Can Happen my last image is the violin having or the scroll having cheerful eyes now apparently winking and dancing as if you know describing the scrollers having this magnetically charming face wasn't odd enough it's now winking and dancing at Seth now explicit recently this refers to the violin scroll as being carved into a joyful face Sylvia's father and it very much suggest the violin is more than just this sort of inanimate object it becomes a lively and animated presence within the shop amongst all of these other instruments and it's seemingly intent on enticing Seth further into purchasing it AKA flirting with it now let's reread the second parag we are directed to so the arrival of the audience and the preparations of the other musicians were now taking place a multitude or subdued murmurs in the audience accompany the discordant scraping of strings and sharply persistent blowing of reads now and then a loud trombone trambone trombone would assert itself or an OBO plaintiff notes would rise demanding immediate attention to its great misery now the three images I have selected are DED murmurs discordant scraping off strings and lastly the loud trombone the fact that the loud trombone would assert itself let's take a look at the table so the first image multitude of subdued murmur this explicitly refers to there being a large number of people in the audience talking quietly implicitly this creates a sense of the audience's anticipation and excitement for what they're about to witness that second image discordance scraping off strings perhaps slightly unexpected but I've been told it's the norm for an orchestra warming up apparently but this refers to the jarring and unpleasant sounds coming from the stringed instruments and this could suggest a lack of cohesion and finesse in the music indicating an unrefined technique in playing the strings possibly and this unexpected quality may surprise the audience who likely anticipated a more beautiful and harmonious performance despite them simply warming up who knows and that last image a loud trombone would assert itself this explicitly refers to the trombone audible sound above the other instruments and implicitly it creates a sense of the trombone commanding presence suggesting its dominance over the other instrument so again a bit of personification there as well as conveying the trombone sense of superiority as it strives to seize control and assert itself at the Vocal Point of the performance now let's take a look at the last two model responses the overall effect of the language creates an image of the violin being a standout amongst the other stringed instruments in the shop despite its concealed placement it commands attention and has a certain Whimsical quality to it firstly the writer describes the violin being partially concealed The Writer's use of imagery here refers to the instrument being almost hidden additionally the writer's use of the word concealed is particularly powerful h hinting at the violence's uniqueness as if it possesses the mysterious quality waiting to be uncovered perhaps imbued with some magical power secondly the writer describe the violin's magnetically Charming face the writer's use of imagery here refers to the attractive aesthetic of the violin evoking its visual appeal furthermore the writers Ed the phrase magnetically Charming is particularly striking as it implies that the violin possesses an irresistible allore or Charisma almost enchanting Seth and tempting him to purchase it as if under a spell lastly the writer describes the violing as having cheerful eyes now apparently winking and dancing the writer use of imagery here refers to the violin scroll as being carved into a joyful face moreover The Writer's use of personification is particularly effective suggesting that the violing is more than just an inanimate object it becomes a lively and animated presence within the shop seemingly intent on enticing Seth further into purchasing it and the last paragraph reads the overall effect of the language creates an image of bustling anticipation and chaotic preparation with a cacophony of sounds filling the air firstly the writer describes there being a multitude of subdued murmur The Writer's use of imagery here refers to there being a large number of people in the audience talking quietly additionally the writers Ed the phrase subdued murmurs is particularly powerful as it creates a sense of the the audience's anticipation and excitement for what they are about to witness secondly the writer describes a discordant scraping of strings The Writer's use of imagery here refers to the jarring and unpleasant sounds coming from the string instruments furthermore The Writer's use of the adjective discordant coupled with the adjective scraping are particularly striking FYI guys if you want to look at more than one powerful word use the verb coupled so the adjective discordant coupled with the adjective scraping are particularly striking and I definitely meant to put verb for scraping there I do apologize where was I it's late uh this suggests a lack of cohesion and finesse in the music indicating an unrefined technique in playing the strings this unexpected quality may surprise the audience who lightly anticipated a more beautiful and harmonious performance lastly the writer describes a loud trombone asserting itself The Writer's use of imagery here ver first the trombone audiable sound above the other instruments moreover the writers use the verb assert is particularly effective as it creates a sense of the trombone commanding presence suggesting its dominance over the other instruments as well as convey conveying the trombone sense of superiority as it strives to seize control and assert itself as the vocal point of the performance another thing to note guys if you look at how I've used my quotations I've embedded them into my sentence so they flow nicely this is not a requirement you'll see things in ellipses you'll the see things in square brackets uh research literary present is just because lots of my students they do world literature and this is what they are accustomed to doing if you're not good at embedding your quotations that's absolutely fine as previously mentioned quite early on firstly the writer uses the image you can just include your quotation after a colon that is absolutely fine so there you have it guys I hope today's video has been useful as always I appreciate your feedback your comments below and good luck with your English exams next week till next time bye-bye