Chris here from IELTS Advantage and in this lesson what we're going to do is we're going to look at task one writing academic, specifically bar charts, and I'm going to write a band nine response with you. The best way to teach task one writing is to talk through with students what you are thinking, what you are doing while you are writing, because task one academic is as much a Thinking test as it is a writing test. So what we're gonna do first is help you understand bar charts and data in general.
Then we're gonna show you a band-line structure and write along with you, write the whole response with you and talk you through exactly why I am writing each thing. And we're also gonna show you the different grammar, the different vocabulary that we specifically use for task one. And don't worry if you can't.
see everything clearly I'm going to zoom in on the different parts so that you can see it nice and clearly so don't moan in the comments okay the first thing we need to do is we need to understand so task one academic questions will always be in this format you will get a paragraph normally just one sentence giving you information about the data then it will say summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. It will always say this, and this is important. And then it will give you the data. Now a lot of students are intimidated by bar charts and line graphs and pie charts and things like that.
But the important thing to remember is a bar chart or a line graph or a pie chart is simply data, raw data, that has been visualized to make it easier for you to understand. Bar charts are easier to understand than just a bunch of random numbers on a spreadsheet. So once you start thinking of it in that way I think it just makes it easier for you to understand and that become less intimidating.
So the first thing that we should do is read. So the bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019. We don't need to know what foreign direct investment is. This is not asking for your opinion in any way. What it is asking you to do is understand the data and report the data accurately.
You don't need to be an economist or a financial advisor to know what this is. Remember they are testing your ability to understand and report data. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
So the keyword here is summarize. It does not say write everything that you see. You will only be writing between let's say 150 and 200 words which is not very much at all.
So you're not going to be writing about every tiny little thing because it's asking you to select the most important things and then report them the main features. Another word for main features or words for main features is important things. And to make comparisons where relevant.
And we'll come on to comparisons in a second. So the next thing we need to think about, and this is important not only for understanding the data, but for what you are going to write about, is what is the person who made this chart? So this is a real chart. It comes from the Financial Times.
The person at the Financial Times who put this together, what are they trying to show you? What is the point of this data? Well, there are two points. Number one is to compare China and India so that people can look at this bar chart and understand the difference between China and India in terms of foreign direct investment. So that's the first purpose of this data.
The purpose of the data, why they made this chart is extremely important and you'll see that when we come on to write the essay. The second thing you've probably noticed is it is showing a trend over time. It is showing what is happening to foreign direct investment over time for 2014 or 2014 sorry up to 2019. So these are the two main things that we are going to report because these are the main features of the data So let's have a look at the data to help us understand So if you get dates over time, it is good to look for general trends.
So for China and Apologies, this is my eight-year-old ruler from school. So if we look at the general trend, you know, 2014, it goes down, stays kind of steady, pops back up, but in general, it's going down, all right? So China's foreign direct investment generally is going down.
If we look at India, it's fluctuating, all right? But it's pretty much staying the same. doesn't go up much from 2014 to 2019, fluctuates a little bit, that is a general trend. One of the key mistakes that I see a lot of students doing is to overthink the data.
But if we use a ruler, it's going down and it's fluctuating, but generally it's staying the same. That is the level of detail that the examiners are looking for in your answer. It does not need to be hugely complicated. So don't make it complicated. Then we're also going to look at maybe the biggest, the smallest.
As we can see, China here has this massive amount of investment in 2018. So we're probably going to mention that. And then if we look overall, it's easy to see that overall throughout this period, China has more foreign direct investment than India. And that's where the comparisons come in.
So you'll see when we start to write about this data, those are the main things that we're going to write about. But first, let's look at the first part of our structure, which is our introduction. The way that I find makes it much easier for students is to break everything up into bite-sized pieces. If you were to get a steak in a restaurant, you wouldn't try and eat the whole steak.
Or if you were to order a pizza, you wouldn't try and shove the whole pizza into your mouth. you would cut it up into bite-sized pieces. So follow me now, follow the steps that I use, and then you will be able to replicate this yourself during your preparation and on test day. So the first thing we need to do with our introduction is simply look at this first paragraph, which is normally one sentence, and paraphrase it.
That's going to be our introduction, that's going to be our first paragraph. Okay, so how have I paraphrased this? Well, I've used a number of synonyms, words that mean the same thing but are different words. So, the bar chart, the chart.
A bar chart is a bar chart. There's no other real way of saying this, so it is fine just to copy and leave out the word bar, the chart. Shows, illustrates, displays, these are all synonyms that you could use. The amount of, the level of.
Don't worry about repeating Words like the or of there's no other way of using a definite article than to repeat it. So foreign direct investment. Foreign investment is just money from outside of the country being invested into that country in one way or another. So instead of foreign investment we have outside investment.
So I've changed the collocations of foreign direct investments to outside investment. So it's best just to think of foreign direct investment and outside investment as two chunks of language. We have repeated the word investment, but we have changed the collocation. Now, there's no other way of saying India.
India is India. China is China. We could say two countries in Asia or something like that, but that's not very precise.
Asia is a massive continent. So instead of just saying in India and China, we said in. the economies of and from to between and from 2014 to 2019 between 2014 and 2019 there will often be dates involved when it comes to these so now that we have completed our first sentence we can move on to the next paragraph your first paragraph will always normally be one sentence paraphrasing this And then we move on to the overview. Now you'll see a lot of discussion online saying that it's important that your overview is the second paragraph or the fourth paragraph.
To be honest, it doesn't matter. What matters is the quality of your overview. It is impossible to get a seven or above without a good overview.
The position of it doesn't really matter. Quality of it does. And we always start our overview with overall comma.
And then what we're gonna do is look at this data and report between two and four of the most important features without reporting any specific data we're not going to talk about 80 billion or 100 billion we normally won't talk about dates this is just the two or three most obvious things about this data another way to think about it is if somebody put a gun to your head and said you can only tell me the two or three most important things about this data without giving me any specific data what would you say and for data over time normally that is going to be general trends generally what happens between the start and the end and if that you are comparing countries or entities something that is being compared normally you will throw in the most obvious comparison. So as we've said before China steadily declined, India fluctuated and China's capital expenditure flowing into their country was generally higher throughout the whole period than India. Remember we talked at the beginning about the importance of understanding the data. The reason why it's so important is you are going to report these key features and you are going to be able to understand the data. So the key features are the economic in your overview.
So my first sentence in my overview, overall expenditure in China declined steadily. So it declined and we're describing the type of decline, which is a steady decline throughout the period. So from 2014 to 2019, and then we compare that with India, but fluctuated in India.
So we're comparing the two countries and we are showing the general trend. So we've two general trends in here and a comparison. So our second sentence in our overview paragraph, despite this, so despite the decline in foreign investment into China, the total amount of money that flowed into China was higher than in India.
Remember, we were looking at the most obvious things about the data. One of the most obvious things is it's bigger in China. And this brings me on to an important point.
Many people get lost in the data because they're looking for things that aren't there. They are looking for complex things that will impress the examiner. They think that if they write something as simple as this, one goes down, one fluctuates, one is bigger than the other, that they're not going to get high enough marks, that this is a really hard test, so it must be more complicated than this.
It's not. They actually make the data very, very obvious and simple. The only people who make it complicated are students because of this mindset that it is complex. It isn't. Once you start to look at good sample answers and then look at the data, you'll start to kick yourself and be like, oh, it's so obvious, why didn't I spot that?
So stop looking for complicated things. Start looking for the most obvious, straightforward, simple things. So well done, we're nearly halfway through. Just by paraphrasing the first sentence and then spotting out the most obvious simple things and putting those into our overview, we're nearly halfway there.
It's not as complicated as you think. Now our next two paragraphs are going to be our details paragraphs. So as you can see in the overview, we have no data.
We have no detailed information about the data. That is what our two details paragraphs are going to include. So we're going to get into the nitty-gritty now. And one thing you have to decide is how are you going to organize these two details paragraphs? Well for this particular bar graph it's very easy and obvious.
Now remember this is a real bar graph from the Financial Times but again most of the questions are organized in this way that it's pretty obvious what you should do. So what we're going to do is we're going to write about China in detail and then we're going to write about India in detail because one of the things that the examiner is looking for is are you organizing the information logically and it is very logical to talk about China and then talk about India. Now if we need to make comparisons we can do that within the paragraphs and I'll show you how you can do that.
So let's look at our first sentence in our third paragraph here. The Chinese economy received just under Sorry, I made a little mistake there. $80 billion in 2014, which fell to around $60 billion in 2015. 2016 and 2016. Don't do this in your real test. I'm just doing this so I don't run out of paper.
I've shortened billion to BN, but in the real test, don't shorten things like that. Just write billion. The dollar sign is fine. You can keep that. So what I've done is describe this part of the data from here to here in detail.
So I'm dividing the data into different chunks. So it's very high here, and then it moves down and stays around the same. So I'm going to just write about that first.
Again, don't try and write about everything at once. And you'll see that I have put just under 80 billion. Because if we put 80 billion, that isn't accurate, because it's not exactly 80. Often these charts, it will be difficult for you to understand exactly what the data is saying.
So it is better to just put just under or approximately or around. I've put here around 60 billion. As you can see, it is around 60 billion, but we don't know if it's exactly 60. Okay, so the next logical thing to do is to describe this dip down here and then this massive jump here and then it dips down back again. So after a slight decrease, in 2017, so it decreases slightly, there was a massive resurgence to a high point of more than 100 billion in 2018 before receding, so going back down to just over 40 billion in 2019. So you'll notice I haven't put the data in for 2017, I've just said after a slight decrease.
Remember you're summarizing and selecting information. You are not reporting every single data point that you see. But this one is very important.
This is the high point. So I am describing it and I'm really highlighting it by saying it's a high point. It's 100 billion, massive resurgence.
And then it drops back down to around 40 billion in 2019. And that's it done for the Chinese. Now we move on to India. So in 2014, foreign outlays into India's economy reached more than 20 billion. so it was more than 20 billion then rose significantly to approximately 60 billion so this one's a little bit over this one's a little bit under so we're going to use the word approximately to describe both of them before falling back down to 2014 levels in 2017 so 2014 2017 are pretty much looking the same so we're going to say falling back so in 2018 there was another massive increase. We've put dramatic increase here because it pretty much doubles before returning to around 20 billion in 2019. So that's us done with India.
And finally, in the same paragraph, what I'm going to do is just compare more specific data between China and India. So I'm going to do this. So if 2015 was the only year India's levels of foreign investment exceeded China's, with values of slightly over 60 billion, and slightly below 60 billion respectively. So this is a key word that you want to understand and probably use in your task one academic responses respectively. So remember, one of the key features was the total amount for China was higher than India.
And this just goes into a little bit more detail on that and says, you know, in only in one year. were India slightly ahead of China. The rest of it, China exceeded. And that's us done.
And as you can see, by breaking it down into this structure, it makes it much easier to understand and to do on test day. Let me just highlight some important vocabulary that you need to be aware of. So you need to be able to describe data and general trends over time declined and how would you describe that decline? fluctuated receding a resurgence it reached more than or reached less than it rose significantly or increased dramatically or dropped falling back dramatic increase values of slightly over so remember the task is just to simply describe data so you need to be aware of how to do that. And then also remember that a huge part of this is describing data accurately.
So you're going to use words like around, more than, just over, approximately, just below, around again, slightly over. So if you can simplify your understanding of the data, follow this structure. report the data accurately, and use the correct grammar and vocabulary, then you have a very, very good chance of dramatically improving your score. But there is another very common vocabulary mistake that lots of students make.
So one of our teachers, Michelle, has put together a video for you, how to avoid this common mistake in IELTS writing task one. So go and watch that one now.