Hello, hello, hello! I'm getting too comfortable on this YouTube channel. And welcome to part four of the Write a Task B essay with me. Today we're going to be writing the third paragraph of the Task B essay that I've been working on over the last couple of weeks on beauty. And if you haven't watched the first part, three parts of the series, then click here.
In those I essentially went through the prompt analysis, introduction, or first paragraph, second paragraph. and today I'll be writing the third paragraph, and I'm kind of excited to do it. We're starting to near the end of the close of this series.
Yeah, I'm excited to finish the essays off, so let's get into it. Hey guys, and welcome back to the channel. If you're new here, my name's Kate Robson, and I scored 80 in Section 2 of the GAMSAT last year in March.
And since then I've just been kind of making videos trying to help you guys to be able to do the same. If you like this video please feel free to give it a like, otherwise subscribe if you're not already, and join the club. Today we're going to be writing the third paragraph of this essay on beauty. It was kind of like about the power of beauty, but I turned it kind of into the power of nature because one of the prompts was more like that.
So yeah, I'm kind of excited to write this paragraph. I think I know where I'm going to send it. Yeah, the first paragraph was kind of about how like the wonder and beauty of nature is easy, good to connect with or like share.
And I think I'm going to talk about that. But in relation to like that, we should appreciate nature more, especially when we live in the city and like in such a modern world. Yeah, maybe I could use COVID as an example, although I don't know. It's a bit on the nose. So I might use Indigenous Australian culture as an example and try and compare like some of the lessons that I've learned from this memory to some of the teachings.
within Australian Indigenous culture. Yeah, I hope I can do it justice, but yeah, that's something that has come to my mind, something that I thought of in the beginning, so we'll see how that goes. And yeah, I'm excited.
I guess we should just get into it. Okay, so I think I'm just going to start, like, I'm going to write this as kind of like a peel paragraph, but I'm going to kind of connect the lesson that I learned to something a little bit bigger. I'm going to start looking a little bit more outside myself and into the world.
And try and connect with this lesson, with how, with what I've learned from things about the world. Yeah, I suppose there are different ways you can approach this paragraph, like how this lesson might teach us something about wider society, or how wider society might teach us something about this lesson. You can try and do both, I try and do both.
But yeah, we'll see how it goes. Okay, so I've written like the first bit, which I suppose is like a topic sentence. I'm trying to link this lesson to bigger things.
And it goes like this. Sadly, I'm not the only one these days who forgets the beauty and power of nature. Modern Western societies are so consumed by the drive of capitalism and the desire for greed that attaining more and more, and attaining more and more that we forget to slow down, relax into our natural impulses, and refrain from joining the rat race. So yeah, I suppose that's good. It's still kind of like maintained the tone that I was...
Using in my first two paragraphs, which is still quite personal, but hopefully I'm starting to kind of connect it to bigger things in the world. Now I'm going to use an example to explain that, which I think I'm going to use Australian Indigenous culture. Okay, whew, okay. I think I went off on a bit of a tangent there.
Um, well, I wrote a lot. I think I wrote the whole thing. Um, yeah, wow, this is-this week has been pretty tricky. I had some problems with the task A one as well.
Um, maybe it's just this week. I don't know. Um, but yeah, I suppose this one was difficult, like, in getting my point across. Maybe I'm not-I'm not focused enough on the argument that I want to make. But I think, again, I could be being too harsh on myself and perhaps I did get the point across.
I think the stuff I wrote here is actually, like, fairly good. But yeah, I'm not sure if I stayed on topic enough or within my argument, so we'll see. Yeah, I'll read it out to you guys now and let me know what you think of it. Sadly, I'm not the only one these days who forgets the beauty and power of nature. Modern Western societies are so consumed by the drive of capitalism and the desire for greed, and attaining more and more that we forget to slow down, relax into our natural impulses, and refrain from joining the rat race.
Such a relentless pursuit calls for a solution, before mental health issues rise beyond rehabilitation. Perhaps looking to non-Western cultures may help us with this. Australian Indigenous culture is centred around the connection between man and nature. and details the profound power of the land. The Dreamtime tells the story of the earth's creation, the First Nations people's experience with our land, the Australian island, and suggests that our feelings of emptiness within a capitalist system is a signifier of a greater cultural malaise.
It is a severe shame that we do not appreciate, integrate, or include Australian Indigenous teachings into our country's Western washed culture. Maybe like, more. Perhaps such an integration would heal some of the suffering that our citizens experience, feeling like a number in a system, a lost soul in a political structure, a person without a, a human without a culture, a country.
I mean, we have a lot of cultures, but I'm not sure if we have one culture, because we are such a multicultural country. And it's a shame, because I think Australian Indigenous culture could be it. But of course we are a country of colonialists, and that has always bothered me. Yeah. This paragraph makes me emotional actually.
This topic is such a big problem. I think we need to solve. Okay, anyway, continuing on.
Australian Indigenous culture praises and highlights the beauty, power and meaning in connecting to the land and putting the land first. Of course, there are complexities in integrating Australian Indigenous teaching and culture into Western culture. In some ways, doing so would remind us of our terrible historical past of assimilation and cultural obliteration, and perhaps Indigenous Australians want to preserve their culture without changing it to fit the white man. the thief of their culture and the land. After all, when white settlers invaded Australia, we stole the land, the very thing we may need to heal us.
Hence, if we are looking, if we are to look to Indigenous Australian culture to help heal us, we must assure that we also focus on solving Australia's racism, discrimination and disenfranchisement issues towards our First Nations people. A greater appreciation and incorporation of Australian Aboriginal culture may be like a careful, respectful... Maybe a component of this process and may help heal all of us from a history of neglect, violence and isolation that has certainly crept into our world today.
Or maybe our country. Okay, cool. I mean, like, it's interesting.
I think it's a good topic to talk about and I hope that I've kind of touched on what I wanted to say which was like about looking to nature for guidance and for cultural and individual healing and personal healing. Yeah I perhaps have swayed from the prompts which are about the power of beauty but yeah that's really what I wanted to say so let me know what you think in the comments. I hope you're finding it useful again so far.
Um, and I can't wait to write the rest of this essay and finish it off next week. So yeah, like this video if you found it helpful, subscribe if you're not already, and thanks so much for watching, I'll see you guys to the next video girls.